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Review:Remus says:
Hey!! Its Perelandra from the forums! Sorry it has taken a while to review it but with the holidays...I've had no time for myself at work. Anyway, on with the review. Since this is only the prologue I'll be limited to what I have to say...but anyway, lets move on! :D

Plot: Its intriguing. I really wanna know WHO he was to protect and what happened to the signal. Was he betrayed? Sounds like far your plot seems solid but since its just the prologue, we really don't know much...

Characterization: Your O.C. seems to be alright. Clare's attitude is understandable but how did she know where to follow him from? And why didn't he just appararated to where he was going instead of running?

Structure: Your narrative is fantastic! Very easy to follow and not TOO detailed. Sometimes when you add a lot of details it can become boring and tedious. You've hit a middle ground which is great. You DO have one tiny problem. "Claire continued to took at him, begging him with her eyes to leave with her." I think you mean 'look'

Other than that, great chapter! I look forward to reading more.

By the way, thanks for being patient! I know its been a while


Author's Response: Hey Remus/Perelandra! Thanks so much for the review :) I understand with the holidays and all, I'm about to go on vacation myself woot!

A lot of these questions you have will be revealed MUCH later in the series. I'm glad you are curious/intrigued. To answer a question I thought was answered in the text: he had to appear muggle in order to not bring attention to himself.

About my narrative, thank you! *beams* I'm glad it was enjoyable and that you felt I found a medium in detail and action. I will fix that little mistake when I get the chance.

Thanks again, I really appreciate the review!


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