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Review:Wiccan says:
OK, I hated this story...so much so that I suffered for 300,000 or so addictive words. Some of it was just too outre! Shooting someone 80 meters in a trunk that was 200 percent larger...just how many feet long was the trunk? Just a little too much 'super' Harry. You really did go over-board or dumb on some things. Like 'a pool size pool'. The whole trunk thing was over the top. Beyond belief or magic. I almost stopped reading there.

On the other hand...sometimes you wax poetic. Truly beautiful wordscraftmanship. Somerimes I would gasp or sigh at your emotional interludes. I love your way of delving into psyches and emotions. Your descriptions are superb and lyrical. Loved how you got Snape back in. Great plots and sub-plots.

Really, I did enjoy these stories very much, except for the too 'super' of things. Tone it down a bit and you will be one of the best authors out there. I generally hate action scenes, but yours were understandable and graphic.

Since you are a 'sick puppy', like me I think you may like something I came up with for an army. Instead of saying "Duck", say "Quack"! "Duck" would warn the enemy, but if you train your army to hit the dirt at "Quack" you have the element of surprise.

I thank you for the entertainment and the release from 'real life'. Please keep writing...you have an enviable talent. You have grown as a writer and I would love to see more from you.

Author's Response: If I was to start this story series again, I would definitely dial back on Harry's power and the quickness with which he gained it, though I'm actually a fan of the 'Super Harry' theme as long as he doesn't become more powerful than Voldemort (I think it makes sense for Harry, as the chosen one, to be a powerful wizard but he still needs to be the underdog for the stories to work). I'm glad you enjoyed some of my writing style and the stories overall and I will look at improving the mistakes you've pointed out, with which I agree. The 'Quack' idea is also a good one and I'll try and incorporate it in the future. Thanks for the review.

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