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Review:InsideTheFire says:
I liked this story. Your writing flows very well, and there are hardly any spelling/grammar mistakes at all, which I positively adored.

It was cute, though completely unrealistic. I don't want to be harsh about stating my opinion...anyhoo. It was kind of cliche, where Draco and Hermione suddenly love each other. You need explanation as to why they suddenly love each other. Jumping straight into it is confusing and...well, it just doesn't work. Draco absolutely hates Granger and everything about her, and Hermione absolutely hates Malfoy and everything about him. I know it's going to be OOC making them love each other anyway, but you need some sort of prologue and build up to their love for each other.

You should, however, keep writing! You're very talented, don't let this review get you down. I didn't mean it cruelly in any way. :) You just need to work on characterization and plot a bit.

Keep up the good work!
-Haven

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :)

I agree. I've been reading other Dramione fics and I definitely need a prologue of some sorts to explain why they suddenly like each other. You've been very helpful, thanks.

Happy Holidays :D
Sophia


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