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Leaney from the forums here!

For your first fic, this isn't bad at all! The first stories I ever wrote are absolutely terrible and I've had to delete most of them! I liked the storyline you stuck to here! It was fun and light-hearted. The switching point of views was also done nicely. However, I found myself a little put off with the suddenness of it all. Hermione and Draco are supposed to detest each other and to go from detesting one another to loving one another so quickly is kind of crazy. To fix this I would suggest adding more action in between? I would add more detail or more explaination in this sudden change of heart. I liked the end, but it also felt sort of out of nowhere. They were flirting and just now becoming comfortable with one another. I think the kiss could've waited but I understand the need for it. As far as grammar goes there's no immediate issues and your flow does fine. Overall, really good work! Keep on writing and keep on developing your characters and the story around them!

-leaney

Author's Response: Thanks for your quick response, Leaney. If I come back to this story and revise it, I will take into account what you've said and change my story accordingly. Thanks again!

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