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Review:GryffinClawTherin_Vicky says:
To start off, I like the fact that you're showing how they call out Albus's immediate family in the next chapter. I suspect the next one will be about James...In any case, it's a really good idea, so kudos on that.
Next, I like that Lily is in Ravenclaw, not in Gryffindor. It's good to change it up and not have all of the Wotters in the same house.
You had some good characterization in this chapter as well. You show how Lily is when she wakes up (something that tends to be quite interesting ;D), what she thinks is the reason for why she's being woken, that she's clumsy, and the fact that she can be quite patient.
I also like that the prefect knows that it's not her place to tell Lily what's been going on. In this chapter you show that Slytherin really isn't what it was. The prefect actually allows Lily a few more seconds of bliss. As the saying goes, "Ignorance is bliss." (I think. :P)
Lovely chapter.(: Off to the next one.

Victoria(:

Author's Response: Woot, another review!
You'll find out that this story is going to jump around from POV to POV from chapter to chapter, even within the chapter, because I figured that it was the best way to get the whole story across to the reader. And yes, part of the next chapter has to do with James!

Lily being in Ravenclaw was actually something I went back and changed, because I figured they wouldn't all be in Gryffindor, and you'll find later that she really fits in the smarty pants house.
The prefect and I had a love hate relationship (especially over if they needed a name!) but I think that was the one thing this one was great at, knowing her place and deciding to keep Lily in the dark!


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