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Review:GryffinClawTherin_Vicky says:
The way you started the story, making everything seem normal from the anxiety before Quidditch to everyone just sleeping, was great because you don't just want to jump into the well, conflict.
Scorpius's reaction was more or less what I would expect. Him not saying anything, only denying the fact that Albus is dead. You had some pretty good characterization with Scorpius. You show us parts of him right away, but you don't make it rushed or anything. This whole chapter goes at a very good pace.
I like how you don't make the Slytherins very boastful or anything, just them wanting to recover lost pride from the War.
It might have slipped your mind that to enter the Slytherin common room there isn't a portrait. ;D
Very good chapter. I like what you have going and you have a really good writing style. Now, I'm off to the next chapter.(:

Victoria(:

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for taking the time to leave a review!
I thought it would be a bit much just to jump into the thick of things, so I'm glad that the set up worked for you. Scorpius is pretty much my favorite, so I had loads of fun with writing him. And I worked for awhile trying to figure out how the Slytherins should act before they came out like that, so I'm pleased that came across right.

The whole path into the Slytherin common room thing will be fixed as soon as the queue is open again, that's what happens when trying to write a novel in a month! xD


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