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Review:Akussa says:
Hey,

This was such a cute story, I really enjoyed it. The idea in itself is very original; giving this annoying character a bit of a good time and actually manage to make her enjoyable in all her quirkiness is really quite something!

I have to say your characterization of Myrtle is spot on. I love how you introduced her at first, setting the reasons why she is, once again, thinking about death and hating it. You also did a great job at keeping her in character all through the story, bringing back her teary and touchy side at times.

I enjoyed Sam quite a lot; original and fullfledge character. He was a perfect counterpart to Myrtle; his nervous and overboard personnality working quite nicely with Myrtle's distanced and quiet one.

I noticed a couple of typos and little errors through my reading and wish to point them out to you so you can improve the (already really great) quality of your story.

How?Ē she barked, suspiciously; you forgot the opening quotation marks before the 'How'

"Thatís right17 years old, "; should be a space between 'right' and '17'

"... throwing in humorous anecdotes from his own life, (and death)."; very small but the coma before the parenthese isn't necessary

Well it was a really good, light and fresh story. I had a really good time reading it and thank you for requesting it; I have to say I greatly enjoyed your style. This story flows naturaly, as if it wrote itself down without work (which I'm sure isn't the case but it goes to show you have a great sense of writting).

Hope you have a great holliday and feel free to request again if you ever feel the need; I would love to read more of your work!

Akussa

Author's Response: Thanks for your wonderful (and speedy) review, Akussa!

Typos like that are really embarrassing, so I appreciate you pointing them out. I will be correcting them ASAP. I'm really glad that you enjoyed Myrtle's characterization and thought that she was true to her character. I'm also happy that you liked Sam. I don't write many OCs, but I really enjoyed writing him. He's fun :)

Thanks again for your lovely review! Happy Holidays!

~Singularity


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