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Review:lunalovegood520 says:
Wow. That was really good!

I was slightly doubtful at first, reading about a (somewhat) pleasant day outside with the young Black family. No doubt, it was original, but I just didn't see it happening.

But as I read on, it started to evolve to a fantastic character piece that seemed incredibly likely. In fact, this is just so in character that when I read the books again, I'll probably consider this scene something that actually happened to the Black Family.

It was fantastic reading about the Black Family as children! Again, everyone was absolutely incredibly well written. Everyone who we 'know' was spot-on, especially as a 'child-version' of themselves and the people we haven't met were wonderfully written and a great way to think of them (I love the way you portrayed Andromeda!)

And so many times, people write Bellatrix either a) not crazy enough or b) someone who cackles way too often (there are other things she does besides cackle you know) and over-crazy. However, you seem to have found the perfect balance to her personality. And everything she does is spot-on, especially her personality in contrast to what is supposed to be 'innocent' snow ball fights :) It's really great!

You also mentioned that you were concerned with the descriptions. I think you did a fantastic job with them! Really - the setting, everyone in the snow, the scarlet gloves. It was all really fantastic. And you used some FANTASTIC parallels of their physical appearance to their personalities (Andromeda vs. Bellatrix's hair) and that added a lot to it. I could imagine everything and I thought your descriptions were GREAT. :) Definitely added a ton to your story.

Congratulations! This is definitely one of my absolute favorite Black Family character pieces. Great development, great characters! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I know it starts out pleasant, and almost contrived, but I wanted it to quickly escalate into a battle of sorts. It all stemmed from a need to write Bellatrix, and I really get a kick out of imagining her as a young girl. Her cackles are a great addition, but I agree that they are not all she's made of! Thanks for the enthusiastic review!

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