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Review:kandekisses says:
Hey hun, I'm sorry for the little wait there!

Well, this was definitely an interesting read. I liked how you put the twist to the challenge you were given. It was cool seeing Ron&Lavender from Hermione's point of view. &I loved how you incorporated the birds in the beginning.

It's pretty astonishing how you got that much shown through so little words. I couldn't do it, I tend to go on and on lol. You could really feel what Hermione was going through and you couldn't help but feel for her.

The only think I'd like to point out is a couple of grammatical errors I saw. Like when referring to Harry you put 'her' instead of 'he'. &There were a couple misspelled words. Also I think it would be great if you elongated a few of the details to really get that completed picture.

Hope you don't think I'm nitpicking, because I really did enjoy reading this. So thank you for requesting. I think your story is very unique yet still canon. Great job.

Good Luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: Hi! :) Thank you for taking the time to review, I know what it is like, to get behind on reviews.

I felt like I had to include the birds, to keep it close to canon.

I used to do that so much but now I seem to write less words. I don't know if it a good thing or a bad thing, though.

Whoops. Did not mean to change Harry's gender but I will get to editing this as soon as the queue is up and running again.

Thank you again, you weren't nitpicking just giving CC. I came third!! :D :D

Ginny45/RandomRed
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