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Review:DemetersChild says:
Hullo there! DemetersChild here from the forums with the review.

I noticed a few grammatical mistakes (capitalization and misspelled words) but it wasn't anything major.

I'll just focus on the suicide aspect of the story since that's the major theme. I think that I would have liked to see more of Ginny thoughts during all of this. Maybe writing it in 1st person would allow for this more than 3rd person. It's hard to tell what's really going on inside her head with the way it is written. I also think it would have been much more interesting to just show how she is acting this year instead of going back to how she felt while everything was going on.

Even so, that "Good Morning, Tom" -- "Goodbye, Ginny" part was really strong. I liked that quite a bit.

I don't know if I can read this and say that Ginny would kill herself. I know that I wouldn't ever understand why someone would kill themselves, but there just wasn't enough shown about her thoughts. I could see why her experiences might mess with her head enough to make that the case, but I just didn't see it here. Especially when she had someone like Ron supporting her.

I did like how she kept seeing the things from her first year when she saw people or went to places that she attacked others. And I enjoyed how you described that when she was attacking them, she felt the anger and hatred and it wasn't just Tom feeling it through her.

Also very interesting how the Dementor's affected her as if Tom were alive again and still possessing her.

It's a very interesting read, but I'd like to see more inside of her head.

Magically Yours,

Dem

Author's Response: Hello there and thank you for reviewing!

I did try to write it first person at first but it was too difficult not to break the TOS when I wrote it that way. I've had a great idea given to me in order to help reach this aspect of the story, on how it all happened the first year and how she felt and acted back then so the next version of this chapter should be a bit closer to Ginny's emotions.

On the suicidal aspect of this (and mind you, this is the professional talking - I work with suicidal teenagers daily), I have to say that, sadly, when a person is so emotionaly distraught, no matter how many strong and loving person she has around her, it would not help her make the choice of living. Sadly when a person reaches this state, they are incapable of thinking outside of their pain.
I do, however, understand your difficulty to understand that (I really wish nobody around here would understand this because it means you've been there and that is not what I want for anyone) if I didn't effectively transmit Ginny's emotional state. I will definitly try and work on that.

Thanks once again for your review, it was really helpfull and gives me great pointers as to what I need to work on to improve this story.

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