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Review:dream_schmean says:
Hey, there! It's dreamschemes from the forums (:

So, I absolutely adore R/S, and I think you did a good job at it. I only have a one thing to say, though.

I think maybe the dialogue is a bit too formal, especially for two sixteen-year-old's. Although I thought it was cute that Scorpius repeated that when they were adults, like it was their thing. Like you said, you're not use to writing the pair, but I definitely know that you'll get better and more used to it. I know that's what I would do.

And their characterization was really good as well. I loved how they didn't need to say much to get their point across. Good job. (:

Other than that, I thought it was adorable, and your description was impeccable. It was so simple, yet so powerful. I loved it (: And I'm intrigued to read the rest of the story to figure out just what she was hiding.

Thank you for requesting!

dream_schmean

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review, I appreciate it so much!

Thanks, and upon rereading it, you are are right that it does sound a bit too formal and I'll try to loosen them up when I work on the next chapter. Branching out is always hard, so CC when I'm working on writing them is so helpful.

That really means a lot to me, and I'm glad the story made you want to read on!
-ginger


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