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Review:Nynfadora says:
To make this seem more spread out perhaps you could have done it in more steps, perhaps;

a) ‘Remus glanced at her and sighed. He then ran a hand through his hair, which as an apprehensive gesture he made when he felt a uncomfortable. “I…I hurt you,” he confessed slowly.’
b)‘Remus sighed, “Fine, I agree.”
c) Addie moaned inwardly as she noticed Remus’ hesitation, but of course she understood him, after all, all those years of transforming and she had caused plenty of damage, scratched floorboards, wardrobes. Guilt was one of the worst feeling out there, and it would never just….go way. It always lingered and took awhile to leave, always leaving a bitter aftertaste in the back of the mind.
“Look, Remus, I know you feel guilty, but this is what being a werewolf is all about- you have to learn to separate yourself from the wolf more, alright? Its not you that scratched me, its your werewolf- got that?
Remus nodded, his cheeks flushing as he looked solidly at his lap.
d) “So, you want this chocolate bar, or what?” asked Addie, trying to put on a smile.
“Are you sure, I mean, I did just scratch y-” Remus started before being vut across.
“ Look, it wasn’t your fault, and whenever you hurt me on a full moon I know that it would never have been done on purpose”
e) Remus manages a smile, albeit a rather weak one, as Addie left the chocolate bar on the wooden table by his bed.
“See you later, and don’t go about hurting me on full moons again!” She grinned cheekily, and left with a cocky wink.

So, that’s it. And those things are tiny, my wouldn’t have noticed them at all however, I’m just pinikity J Keep up the great work as I’m loving your story so much!
And in answer to you questions:

1) No, Dumbledore doesn’t know about the RoR, however he stumbles across it in Harry’s forth year, but doesn’t understand it, and can never find it again.
2) It depends if the head girl was prefect for the year before- if she wasn’t then there would be a 7th year prefect (the same one as the years before), if she was then there would be no prefect for that house

Keep it up, keep writing!

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And thats part two- haha, it was too long to fit onto one chapter, so I had to do it over two- hope you don't mind- it was over 1200 words long!

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