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Review:xLauriePotter says:
notreallyblonde44: Hi! Laurie here with your requested review over at the forums ^.^
Okay firstly, Wow! I found this immediately intriguing by the way you used the mysterious elements, e.g. Not knowing that his "attacker" was his wife until afterwards, I found my pulse racing a little at one point and then finding it was his wife I seemed to sigh a bit?

Also, I like the brief mention of Dumbledore's vague mission "he was to protect" as this seems very much what Dumbledore would of said, so even without his face being shown you characterized him perfectly.

Of course your other two characters are OC so I can't really comment on their characterisation too much, but I thought that Chris' was well thought out and seemed very protective/loyal, so I grew fond of him in the little time we had.

I'm guessing that the (was it death eaters?) killed him then? :( Or possibly just seriously hurt?

I'm quite intrigued as to whats going to happen and to where this story is going to go from here, So as for your worry on this. Don't worry? Haha. I think the chapter was structured well and perfectly written for your purpose.
Good Job!
Laurie.

Author's Response: Thanks Laurie! I really appreciate the review and you reviewed it so quickly lol.

I'm glad you got a sense of Dumbledore with the statement, which I was debating about how to do for awhile while writing this. So that's awesome haha. And I'm glad you enjoyed the little jaunt with Christoph. We'll see how this moments plays a role muuuch later in the story. Yes, they were death eaters :) Maybe I should look at that and not make it as vague hmmm.

I'm glad you are intrigued! That makes me happy lol. Thanks again!

Best,
Lisa


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