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Review:MajiKat says:
hey hun
here to review

this wasn't bad - i liked the pacing and the flow of words. it had a suitable tone for such a recount, and i liked that you didn't dramatise it. it had the slight feel of a historical document - factual in a way. i liked the way you wove canon into this, with the mention of the Prewett brothers.

I think a consistent POV would have worked better. If they whole story had been told from Marguerit's POV I think there would have been more authority. as it is, there is a detachment in the emotional sense and i think that might be why im thinking history text, lol. but, it does work as it is.

if you wanted to plump it up a bit I'd think about sticking to her POV and with that, you can make space for deeper more emotional stuff, if that is indeed where you want to go with it.

grammar, spelling and punctuation were all good as far as I could tell ^_^

the idea of why the boys joined Voldie is clear, but i think we need more about their feelings about the matter. you begin to touch on it at the end - maybe that idea could be expanded?

all in all, i liked this xD
xx

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