Oh. My. Dear. Merlin.
You have me in tears, love. That was quite possibly the darkest piece of Twin fic I have ever read, but boy am I glad that I read it. I love angst, but this...this needs it's own genre, because it's that amazing.
Let me tell you, I was waiting LITERALLY on the edge of my seat for a scrap of dialogue...maybe a simple "George?" or "Fred?" or anything...but it made the story that much better that it didn't need dialogue. It was almost as if their pain was enough of a communication for them, which is depressing, but so, so genius.
Your prose is phenomenal. "He wants to live, but more importantly, he doesnít want Fred to watch him die." That was my favorite line of the story. It's so simple, yet so haunting. Good choice making it the end of a paragraph. It was nicely placed.
I absolutely loved this story. It completely captures the essence of what war really does to people. Fred and George, even though they are the most lighthearted characters in the book, were pulled of as IC during this fic. Everything made sense.
"A figure emerges, another cradled in his arms, backlit as if by the flames of Hell itself, staggering on torn feet into the night. Death nips at his heels, reaches for the limp form he carries, but he holds tightly, refusing to let go, and presses on, one weary step after another, away from the carnage and on toward home." - This paragraph was what sent me over the edge. It's beautifully written.
You're an amazing writer. Never stop writing Twin fics, please. I will forever worship the ground on which you tread. :)
Author's Response: I may have had you in tears (which I'm sorry for, btw) but your review left me giddy. THANKS so much!
This IS the darkest Harry Potter thing I've ever written, and it really was rather hard to do it to my beloved twins who are usually so light-hearted, but I knew it had to be them or it wouldn't work. I'm really awed you liked it so much.
Writing without the dialogue wasn't really that hard. You'd think it would have been, with the twins being so talkative and such, but surprisingly that wasn't the difficult part. The difficult part was finding the right words for everything else, because the style that this fic insisted on appearing in made it so there was no room for extra words. Gave me fits! And so I can't thank you enough for the compliment on the prose, because I really did work hard on it.
I really wanted to show the depth of a bond that the twins have, and to take that theme in Harry Potter of love having a power that rivels that of magic and expound on it. I also wanted to show that Fred and George are more than just jokers and tricksters. They have depth and maturity and seriousness as well. I'm very glad you think it worked.
Thank you so so much for a wonderful review! As for the worshiping thing - now you are just making me blush. But, if you really did like it, I have other twin fics out there. Perhaps I should request again. :)