Hello! Here with your review.
Never read anything about Theodore. Eager to. :D
Your opening is well done. I like how real he feels by being scared. The practice is neat. Even though you didn't write it out in full details, I could really see him standing there, talking to himself and such. Very real character.
Awww D: He just snatched them. I felt my heart sink a little. Poor guy. I mean...bad wants Voldy to win guy...poor Theo.
What is a CV?
I really like the change over. It was like this spark of his life, then you get into a more heavy scene. I really really like that you have them so downtrodden. It is real and now as I say this, I remember the story of yours that I read before with Draco/Astoria. :D Yeah, I read guys better. I find it hard to get into female sto- I'm rambling on, sorry!
Ouch! Draco going to trial, I love it!!
I like the way you wrote Draco. I can hear his words in that my father will hear about this tone of voice, which granted it more Tom Felton ringing in my ears, but since he plays the part so perfectly, I can't imagine Draco with any other voice than his. The point was...oh yeah, he feels spot on character!
Your ending was brilliant. It was cold and harsh and cruel and I loved every word of it! < = That sounded a bit twisted on read back. My thread does say I like unhappy endings. ^^
You asked about your flow...it was a bit middle ground for me. The * was a clear indicator and that kept it from ruining the flow. I feel like your strong suit is in the narrative. There's nothing wrong with your dialogue, I just prefer your narrative. It's lovely. So the flow, I'm sure that it could have been a tad smoother, but it didn't hang me up or make me stop and go Whoa what? :D
I said it earlier, I love your Draco. I always kinda falter a bit when presented with part of the main circle of characters (Trio, Ginny, Weasleys, Draco and such) because I'm really, really picky about canon. I feel satisfied completely. Draco seemed right on to me and I enjoyed this very much. :D --Jenna
Author's Response: Ooh, hi!
Ah, Theodore. Babe of my life, seriously, I need to write way more about him. He's the best minor character in the HPverse. Of course that's just my opinion (:
A CV is a Curriculum Vitae. It's basically what you had over when you apply for a job. Qualifications, addresses, previous jobs etc. Probably a bit of a Britishism there :$ I don't know what the American English equivalent is, but I do know that they are pretty nasty to write. You know, condensing yourself onto a page.
Downtrodden characters are like the loves of my life. I've got to stop writing so many, ahha! It's just fun to write about mopey, poor, whinging downtrodden people, for some reason.
Ohhh my, I'm so glad you said that. I find Draco increasingly hard to write. You'd think that practise would improve his characterisation, but he seems to get worse the more I write about him, argh. Glad he worked here, although granted his appearance was pretty brief (:
No worries, I like unhappy endings too ^^ says a bit about me, doesn't it? Liking downtrodden misery characters and unhappy endings. Erm, well.
Ahha, I find narrative much easier to write. Dialogue...it has a habit of sounding forced or stilted because, of course, unless you can fully get inside a character's head, you have no idea how they would speak. My dialogue does need some practise, I'll admit, to make it sound more natural - I think I've been told before that it's quite blunt and not really natural.
I falter when trying to write them, but I'm so obsessed with 'conquering' Draco's character, so to speak, that he crops up eventually in just about all of my stories. I've got to stop, ahha! Really pleased you like it though (:
Thank you very much for the review! (: