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Review:Elysium says:
Hi Amanda,

I'm Kylie from TGS and just popping by to check out your work, which I've never actually read before. I have to say, this story caught my eye immediately because I've always adored Reguls/OC... mostly because we just know it's going to relentless pull at heart strings after what happened to him, but also because we know what kind of person he really was, and that's not the one Sirius depicted him as.

I thought the narrative voice was lovely, like an ode to her former love. It was quite fragile, and though you had plenty of languid and lovely imagery, it was never over-wrought or burdensome. A hard line to walk, quite often.

The use of short, simple sentences punctuated it beautifully.

Also, despite the fact that the story is clearly bittersweet and nostalgic, there is an uplifting note toward the end, the idea that their daughter might be safe and have a future is a lovely one.

Great work over all :D

- Kylie

Author's Response: Hi there, Kylie! I'm glad you enjoyed the read! :)

It's wonderful to hear that the narrative voice and imagery and simple sentences were written well. I think inspiration makes it easier to write this way, and sometimes that in itself is difficult to come by. Thank you so much for dropping by to review! I appreciate your feedback! :)

~amandatonks


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