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Review:Pen2Paper says:
Hey,

Pen2Paper here from the forums with your review :)

Well, it's immediately clear that even though this story is just starting out that writing seems second nature to you. You have shown your talent in this chapter by holding the readers attention and making the words flow naturally. The detail you've put into the chapter is just the right amount to captivate the reader and help them "see with your descriptions" and feel what you are telling them in your story. It's a rare ability and you have done well in exercising it.
Your characterisations, settings, conversation are all very good... (I cannot comment on the French though since I don't know it myself) The analogies you use are flawless, forget-me-not eyes in particular was something that left an imprint in my mind.
I believe that the way you have brought to life the Black Manor in all its grandeur was very well written and portrayed.

The ending too was wonderfully impacted,leaving the reader curious for the rest of the story.

Very well done indeed! Wonderfully well written :)
10/10

Thank you for requesting :)
~Cali

Author's Response: Hello!! Sorry for taking so long to reply..

I'm really flattered! :$ I've been working on my descriptions so - hehe - thank you very much :) Yes, as for the French, I guess googletranslator would have to suffice :P

Thank you very, very much for reviewing! I really appreciate it!


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