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Review:Pen2Paper says:
Hey!
Pen2Paper from the forums with your requested review!
So sorry it took so long to get this review out... it's... i've been saying this a lot these last days as an apology, it's been a crazy few weeks! :P Anyway on to your review...
Umm well this one will probably be a short review, because I loved it so much and I couldn't spot much to criticise :)

Honestly is was great and very enjoyable. The settings, the prose, your narrative and flow it all works well with each other and compliments each other so well done really. I know how hard it is to pull a background character to the centre and make it work but whoa you did it with flare!

I loved Authur and Molly, perfectly in character as far as I could say and Molly less with her funny outbursts in her younger years not worn down by household work and seven children :) I love that Fabian and Gideon and twins, that's interesting! and the Christmas with the Weasleys was just wonderful and simple just as I would have expected it!

On the whole it was great. The only pointer I can think of to give is in the flashback scene of Molly's graduation party, the boys apparate home but they are both twelve and underage to apparate. Other than that it was a lovely read!

Thanks for requesting.
~Cali

Author's Response: Thank you so much; I'm really, really happy to hear such kind words regarding this story.
I had such a good time writting it, I'm glad this feeling gets through to the reader.

I'm glad you noticed I tried to give Molly a bit more of a relaxed personality; like you said, she doesn't yet have the pressure of her full family! As for Fabian and Gideon, I always pictured them as twins though not necessarily the type Fred and George are!!

Thanks for pointing out the Apparition thing; I did mean it to be side-along Apparition but if it's not clear, I'll make the correction.

Thanks again for your review, I appreciated it greatly!


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