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Review:angeless7fallenstarsong says:
Love your first paragraph. I've always wondered if any of the other students caught onto the Marauders' secret.

"...witnessed the three fourth year students disappear and in their place were three animals." You might want to rearange this. Maybe "...witnessed the three fourth year students disappear. In their place were three animals."

Aw :) James wants to watch Lily sleep!

You might want to look over your grammar (you're missing some punctuation, especially in the dialogue) and maybe flesh out the story with some description. I'd also like to have seen some more insight into the characters' emotions. Like, how did Lily feel about/react to James? etc.

Great story! :)

Author's Response: Hi. :)
I know someone MUST have seen them at some point. Well other than Snape.

Hmmm... I see what you mean, I have never noticed that before.

It seemed like something he would want to do. :)

I will look over this one, after I look over TSC chapter and I am looking over that one after I finish my reviews. Wow, long list.

Thank you!
Ginny45 xxx

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