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Review:angeless7fallenstarsong says:
Yay :) Thanks so much for submitting! This is really lovely!

I love the way the story starts. The reader immediately understands what Hermione's going through. The only thing I'd add is some description of the classroom. I also love the way you used the ship I gave you! :) Very unusual take.

"It was insufferable, she though of all the times they had, had together." This is a bit confusing. It should probably be two sentences, like this: "It was insufferable. She thought of all..."

I love your second paragraph. :) It lends a touch of angst to the story, while still being focused enough to make sense for Hermione. And it's good backup for Hermione's feelings.

You also make it easy to sympathize with Hermione, so kudos for that.

This might be random and opinionated, but I think that Hermione would refer to Krum by his first name, not his last.

Your last sentence is a bit confusing. You might want to clear that up a bit; I'm not exactly sure what you're trying to say there.

Overall, amazing story! :) Thanks so much for entering the challenge! I'll post the winners asap.

Author's Response: Hey :)
Thank you for the review :)

I sat down to write it and just thought, I hate Ron/Lavender I am such a Ron/Hermione person. So I twisted it. :)

I see what you mean about the description and the sentences and will get right on it.
I hate that loads of people think she is awful for what she "did" to Ron. She was hurt too.

I had not even noticed I had used Krum... My bad. I think the last sentence doesn't sounds right because I put thought and ought so close together. I will change it.

Thank you :)
Ginny45/RandomRed xxx


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