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Review:Gaiapet says:
Try 2! I'm not sure what was so bad about my first review, but whatever. In this attempt I will be making the scandalous things in this chapter family friendly!

I also wanted to have another night next to the lake BAKING WITH Oliver Wood like I had the previous evening.
Nothing would make me forget about that considering my three best BRILLIANT friends would have their PUPPIES.
ANGELS.
“What IN THE WORLD?” I said, tearing my own letter open.
“Well, we don’t give a COOKIE about Quidditch after we graduate since we’ll be opening our joke shop,” said George.
“You’d better be playing next year, HANDSOME, because there’s no way I’ll be back in the air!”
It would be like a second Oliver Wood, though the meetings would probably go faster since she was HAVING TEA PARTIES with one of the Beaters.
“I told him of course I would love to stay just wait for a few minutes to come pick me up so I can break up with my DEAR of a boyfriend.”
especially Oliver, actually committing to one woman. That FAMILY MAN.
Katie kept sneaking glances at the ring and POKING her fiancé while the topic strayed to summer plans.
He pulled me closer and TAPPED my temple lightly.
I doubted he wanted to since the idea of marriage obviously scared the EVILNESS out of him
Oliver TICKLED me lightly on my cheek.
“I’m going to have to put up with you all SPLENDID summer I need to take a breather here.”
“And you’ll probably want to come and see some of my games once I’m a Quidditch star because all of the women will be begging me to sign PETITIONS FOR them you’d THANK me for. Oh, and you’ll probably want me over for dinner because your dad suggested it. And you’ll want to come to my place for dinner—oh, WHAT BLISS, you’ll be expecting me to cook, won’t you? I don’t really see that happening. You’ll expect the side of the COUCH toward the window in my flat and you can CELEBRATE if you think that’s happening.”
I think she might be expecting some more TEA PARTIES and to have dinner with his family
“BEAUTIFUL CHILD OF GOD, aren’t you?” He chuckled.
I HELD HIS HAND again
He stole a tiny CAULDRON CAKE.
“WRITE me, Perry,”
I SHOOK HIS HAND calmly and he tensed up in my arms. I broke the HANDSHAKE.

I think that those corrections make your story sufficiently family friendly. Although I didn't address the violence. I hope it works anyhow. If not, I have no idea what 12+ means. I would be happy to read any future chapters and make them appropriate for readers of all ages. It shouldn't detract from the story in any way.

In all seriousness, I love this:
“Don’t you have someone else to boss around? Fifth year Shrieker girls? Ravenclaw Beaters? The rest of your bleeding team?”
It brings the story full circle. I love the continuity of your stories. I never know what will reappear in the next chapter! Hopefully the new story will have some of Libby. I see her becoming allied to either Jane or Bridget. Many authors really fail at this extremely important part of writing. Keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: Thanks for doing this again :) I really appreciate it. Authors strive on their reviews sometimes (especially if they're having a particilarly bad day like me today) and ones like yours make my day better :)

I am DYING laughing at the corrections. Puppies almost made me spit my drink everwhere. Definitely family friendly. I think you might want to make some chapters of Hide & Seek family friendly. BTQC might be a lost cause with poor James.

I'm so glad you like my crazy balance of things :) That's my favorite part of stories. And a lot of the things just happen. Red Wine? Totally just happened randomly when I had them go liquor shopping. Then I thought it would be funny to have Oliver give it to her at Christmas. Suddenly they were down in the kitchens drinking and the rest is history.

Thank you so much for the amazingly hilarious review that really made me feel better :)


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