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Review:Kerichi says:
I do feel sorry for the Muggles sometimes. Not only for not having magic, but for expecting that we’ll help them with all their troubles—for eternity

I really felt the wry humor in the added "for eternity" and enjoyed the "dysfunctional wizarding family" take on the gods. If you fixed the paragraph spacing (it's so huge it breaks continuity) it would make reading easier.

It's funny, in movies gods often have British accents, and in this story I'm reminded of a character in A Knight's Tale saying, "Well, the Pope may be French, but Jesus is English!"

Your Zeus sounds English. And modern. It's the word choices like "serial killers", "ego," and "stuff" and phrases like "a bit" and "some rubbish."

I'm not saying it's bad. I liked the story. Zeus just doesn't sound like someone from the past, and it's something to consider in future writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I am aware of the spacing issue, I've honestly torn my hair out over it but I think I've now gotten it figured out and I will fix it up as soon as I can. Because the story's a bit tongue-in-cheek, I didn't go to huge efforts to make Zeus seem ancient Greek, and I am the first to admit he employs some modern colloquialisms. However, it was written as a bit of fun and not a serious analysis of Ancient Greek life (as you may be able to tell :P) Thanks for the review, I appreciate it, and am glad you enjoyed it, despite its flaws :D

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