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Review:Singerinwhite says:
It's good. Feliciti still grates on my skin, but now I know why you made her the way you did. =)

However, I've got a critique: Voldemort. I really don't think he would have looked like the way he did in the Black manor. In fact, I don't think he would have looked like that at all.

Voldemort's got seven horcruxes - if we go by chronological order, we know horcrux number seven was nagini (made in 1994 with the death of the muggle gardener at the beginning of the Goblet of Fire), and that number six was Harry (thanks to Lily's ~saving powers of love~ on Halloween 1981).

This means there were five horcruxes already made at the point that you have the Black family sans Sirius meet Voldemort. JKR/Dumbledore make it clear that making a horcrux is so violent, it takes a part of you away physically - as seen with the famous descriptions of Voldemort in the books.

This being said - I personally thing he would be far more frightening than you are making him. I don't see any issue with keeping the hair, but I do think that the infamous "nose that look like slits on his face" should be noted - or some observation that it barely looks like he has a nose. And perhaps his eyes should be an abnormal color to show the transition to red (does he have red eyes in his final form?). But definitely the nose. He should have a serious lack of a nose, save for something that looks like it's almost to the slits that are described in the books.

Author's Response: Hehe! I'm glad she's been justified :P But I know how you'd feel; reading her being as she is.

I've noticed that too as I read through this chapter! Thank you for reminding me about Voldie! I agree with ya and I'll change it asap! I don't even remember if i mentioned his nose... :P

Again, thank you for reviewing! I really appreciate it and thanks for sticking by so far! :D


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