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Review:Mistress says:
It's me, it's me!

I'm here to review :) Ah, I loved this chapter so much! You did exactly what I was hoping you would do. You gave a lot more levels to the characters, which I loved. The cat-shaving was hilarious, but my favorite part was actually the scene in the Great Hall. His interactions with Rose and Lily were great. And Luxe! I'm so interested in what is going to happen with her!

Hey, I have some snippets/ideas that I'm not sure if you've thought about or maybe some theories? Who knows.

It would be hilarious if Lily would end up dating Zeke or Jackson. I'm sure you have plans for them. Or even go on a date, or have a drunken kiss. It would be such an awesome juxtaposition between her flirting with them before and them thinking she is annoying, and then finding her attractive, which Albus would freak out about. And I would love to watch that.

Also, what if Albus was kicked off the team? Palmer's threat made me think about it. Not for the whole story, of course, but for a part of it. And it would be an opportunity for him to learn a little bit about being arrogant and finding himself. Then there could be a scene where maybe she needs his help in her captain position and she caves a bit and asks him back on so he can help her. It would be a great bonding scene between them so they can sort of put their differences aside...maybe?


Favorite quotes:

Usually her curly hair is down and frames her face like a curtain.
-Fabulous description. The sounds between "curly" and "curtain" really make this sentence shine.

I didn’t plan on running to the Great Hall, I was passing by and smelled sausages. Need I say more?
-Uh, no! Sausages are FAB.

I really loved this chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one! I think Al really has some learning to do, which is going to be a great journey. I'm really looking forward to how Alexandra is going to relax to not making the team since she totally owned everyone else. I'm thinking there is another level to that whole "just because she's my mate thing." Is there some tension between them? Is Palmer scared of Alexandra being better than her? Fighting over a boy? No idea. Can't wait to find out, though. Dale got really lucky.

Great chapter! 10/10

Author's Response: Ahh, hi (:
Thank you so much for your review!!

I have so much planned for Lily, Zeke, and Jackson. I actually have one little tiny scene in the future that is supposed to lead some unwanted drama for poor Lils.. and probably others (;

Thats a really good idea about Al and the team and Palmer! I'll have to think some things and see what happens (; thank you!

haha I indeed love sausages. Albus gets it from me ;D

Thank you so so much and we will find out SOON about the whole Palmer not choosing Alexandra... bring on the cat fights !

Thank you (: I hope you keep reading!!

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