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Review:Elizabeth_Black says:
Hi! It's Elizabeth23 from the forums, here with your review :)

I really liked the idea of this one-shot. It was interesting and an enjoyable read. Also, I thought the plot was well thought out and rather cute. The ending really brought a smirk to my face, as well.

Normally in my reviews I do dedicate a paragraph for grammar and spelling, pointing out mistakes and how to fix them, however I feel I would just be repeating myself. There are still many commas missing (eg: "Yes(,) Lily?" and "Nope(,) nothing to do with us. Sorry(,) Lily(,) you'll have to-"), also a few spelling mistakes are present and there are a few sentences that don't really flow. I would suggest you put a request in over on the forums to find a beta, as it is a shame to see a story story being spoiled by grammar.

However, despite all that, I did think that you captured the Marauders character very well, and Lily's characterisation was perfect . I could easily imagine her falling asleep while studying.

The line near the end about Sirius checking his hair was really funny! It seems like something he would definitely do, and very in-character from the way I feel you've written him, even though he wasn't really a major character.

Thank you for the request! This was a very cute read, and I did enjoy it :)

~Lizzie

Author's Response: Hey thank you for the review. :)
I love the ending to the story because it is so increadibly ironic.
I have just gone over the story again because everytime I read it I notice a few more things.
However I may get a beta, to check over it.
Thank you for telling me what I get right and what I am missing.
:) Ginny45/RandomRed xxx

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