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Review:elegantphoenix says:
Draco and Harry (pseudo) lovers? For a job? Such a brilliant idea! And the real winning part? The who exchange and reasoning for why they, of all the people in the Auror department, were chosen actually made sense. Which is good :) It makes this whole chapter seem all the more believable, and with pairings (or fake pairings, in this case) like Drarry, it's hard to make them believable or less cliche without changing Draco from the start. Here, you managed to stay true to his character, which I really liked. Also, your description and characterization were fantastic. Especially the indirect comparison between Draco's OCD-ness and Churchwell's messiness.

Only found a few grammar errors, nothing huge though:
- "Probably Churchwell got wind of some rumor..." should be:
"Churchwell probably got/caught wind of some rumor..." for better readability.

- "At this Churchwell managed to look both uncomfortable, pitying, and exceedingly evil all at once..."
You can remove the word 'both' because there are more than two adjectives being used in this list, so the word 'both' isn't necessary.

That's all I could spot :)

Sorry it's taking me forever to get all of your reviews done, but I haven't forgotten about you, I swear! I'll try to get more of them done this weekend.

10/10,
Nadhira

Author's Response: Hey Nadhira! I am horrendously sorry for the late response -.-

I spent so long trying to come up with a plausible mission that would require them to pretend to be in love. I'm going to try my best to keep Draco in character, even in parts where he's pretending to be in love with Harry!

Thank you for pointing out those mistakes! The former is actually something I chose for voice, but the second is just plain oversight on my part and I've fixed.

Thanks for the awesome review, I'm glad you liked it!


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