here to review ^_^
i actually came across this on fanfiction net, lol. im pretty sure that version was...different, hahaa!
okay, what continuity issues? i can't say i noticed anything, and i read this really closely, knowing you'd mentioned it. seriously, everything seems fine.
at first, i really disliked rose's character but then, as i read more, i got over that. it was nice to see their roles reversed in a way. i have read too many fics where he is the womaniser and rose the innocent, sweet little girl. not that scorpius was innocent or even sweet in this - he was an ordinary guy, and i liked that.
the other thing about rose though...she seemed really...american :/ like i was watching an american teen drama or something. sorry, thats just what i got from her. i don't know if it was intentional (i know she was drunk as well, lol) or not.
i liked that he found some peace in the end, but i have to wonder, would it last? rose was all about experiencing life, so i can't imagine her staying with him. poor scorpius!
anyway, not bad hun. not what i usually read but thats not to say i didn't enjoy it!!
feel free to request again!
Author's Response: I hope the one you came across on FF net was mine! I was using the other site to promote the podcast, hence why my stories started showing up there. But I hope that it was under my account!
As for rose's character, it was not my intention to make her seem American. I was, rather, trying to make her drunk. Definitely not an American teen drama...I don't even watch those :) I did when I was a teenager, of course, haha. But that's ok, I will go back and review the dialogue and see if there isn't some way I can make her seem less flighty and American.
I strive to make my characters as normal as possible, because there are so many characters out there that make them seemingly "extraordinary." But I imagine them all as normal people, trying to get through life.
As to whether or not it would last- maybe. I don't really know, I never thought past the one night stand, haha.
Thanks for your honesty, I'm glad you enjoyed it.Thanks for the review!