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Review:Prongs05JP says:
Yay! Another awesome chapter :D (hehe... told you I'd get round to doing this :P) So. This chapter - I like it :D It's really sweet the way you showed the relationship between James/Al/Lily, especially the piggy back rides! *grumble* I wan' a piggy back...
ANYWAY. It was also a really cool idea to have Scorpius with a younger brother 8) Do I sense a little... ah, tension, between him and our young protagonist? ;D Either way; can't wait to see him show his true colours! I feel Lily's pain about the early mornings... can't stand them... and then finding Slytherins in your kitchen?! Bad morning. Nice idea with the whole 'I will never befriend a Malfoy'. I'm guessing that's because of a few not-so-nice stories told by Uncle Ronald, hm? Well, let's hope she changes her mind, Sam seems like a nice guy :P Although with raising Fred and George, I wouldn't have thought Mrs Weasley to be oblivious to the goings on of teenage boys searching for a few birds... but alas, this is your creative license :) Ahh, the perfect dress. Very nice - perhaps we'll see her in it later on in the story, or more specifically; Sam may see her in it... he certainly seemed to like what he saw. ;D

Ahem. *shuffles forward bashfully* As the usual snobby self that I am, I have a few Jamesie's improvies. T_T' So first off, "you're little girl cuteness" should be "your little girl cuteness", I think, unless I've completely misread the sentance... and "Basically, the bloke is was pretty darn attractive" - either is or was, right? ^^ "that marked Fred and James and the rest of the group (accept the slick blonde heads that" perhaps you mean 'except' instead of accept? Easy mistake to make, they seem so similar! *Glares at words >>* Apart from those really simple errors, I saw a few tense ones (UGH, so guilty of this myself. I am such a hypocrit...) and YAY.
Also. Sometimes this chapter seems a little rushed - take your time! Describe some things; what does the town look like? Are there a lot of old fashioned buildings or is it fairly modern? What kind of clothes in the shop make Sam squirm? (XD) And maybe the boys could have a few stories to report... (I can help you there, if you need any XD)

All in all, I really loved this chapter, and I do wonder if that necklace was bought... ;) Hope to see some more of the awesome stuff next chapter - and sorry for being overly fussy/critical/snobby xD
9/10
Lots of loff!
J xx

Author's Response: Wow, you really did come back! Woot! I'll go fix the errors *coughsnobcough* ;) You're definitely helping me with the Sam stuff if you want me to do it XD It makes me so happy to see a review, especially from my PSJ! I've actually seen the excpet mistake in one of your things heehee (I can't remember which one), but I will fix it, just for you ;D

Lots of loff right back at ya!
K/MG


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