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Review:SuperMegaFoxyAwesomeHot says:
Wow, this story is awesome so far! It's unlike anything I've read on this site. Though my favorite couple will always be Ron/Hermione, I do enjoy Oliver/Hermione. :) I think the Cormac/Hermione twist will definitely give this story some extra flavor.

I like your humor; it's subtle and is basically playing off of character traits than situations, which I think you've handled well. The Burrow scene was great; you really got down the different characterizations, some in just a sentence or two.

I liked how you aren't just glossing over the events of the War but are mentioning how tragic events such as Fred's death ( :'( ) are shaping everyone's lives, some more discreetly than others, but all are still affected.

The line about death destroying not just the life it takes but the life of those left around the person was very powerful. I've noticed you like to bang out some great one-liners between paragraphs that wrap up a basic-but-substantial theme and help transition into a new line of thought.

I also liked how Oliver said that Harry certainly deserved to be happy; the cheerful atmosphere was fun. :) I do agree with Oliver, though, that perhaps the Weasleys - especially Mrs. Weasley, considering we know her greatest fear was/is any of her loved ones dieing - should've been grieving Fred's life more. But I bet they already cried enough over those past weeks to last a lifetime of tears, and it's still probably a shock to them, AND there were so many others who died in the War that they know they've just gotten get on with live and life it to the fullest, like those who died would want them to do.

Hahah, perhaps I'm getting to philosophical with this. Perhaps you just wanted them to be cheery because reading about a bunch of miserable people isn't very enjoyable for your audience. :P

The Hermione/Ron fight was good and believable, but I do think you characterized Ron as a bit too controlling. When he said, "You know how I feel about you talking to other guys!" was really the only part of the conversation that didn't bode well with me. It made Ron look slightly abusive, dictating who Hermione can and cannot talk to.

That's just a general pet peeve of mine - when Ron is characterized as being controlling, overly jealous, or - worst of all - when he cheats on her. What the heck?? ... lol, sorry, I'll get back on topic with YOUR review. :)

But the rest of the conversation got back into character with Ron being so clueless as to not know Hermione had only used Cormac to make Ron jealous. Haha ^_^ And Mrs. Weasley having to drag her children away from the dramatic scene? Classic.

I liked the ending, because it's as if Oliver's feelings toward one scene is unwittingly foreshadowing how his own life will be unfolding. I am very excited to continue reading this!! :D

Love,
Sarah

Author's Response: Wow. Best review I've ever had! Thanks so much, and I'm taking all your points into consideration when I put up the next chapter, which will hopefully be soon! Thanks so much, I really appreciate your comments :D

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