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Review:thehyacinthgirl says:
Another beautiful chapter, I must say! :)

I found a couple of errors, though: She was short, with a sweet face and clear features. Her white silk robes flew in the winds and she chucked to herself, before turning to me. I think you meant chuckled.

Also, you say here that Astoria's robes are white, then somewhere else you say that they are grey. Just thought I should point this out to you.

Other than that, I didn't find any other grammatical or spelling errors, that I found.

Your characterizations were wonderful.

Hehe, yay! Nicky and Scorpius are official. How lovely! I was wondering when that would happen, but I'm glad that it took a while to do so. I hate stories where people get together too quickly, in all honesty.

I really liked Astoria. She seemed different from so many other people's takes of her, and it was a breath of fresh air. As for Draco, I don't know how I feel about him. He seemed canon, though. I can't imagine that he'd deign to talk to a Weasley girl. Not unless he really had to.

As far as Lisette and Louis go, I'm not sure how I feel. We didn't really see what happened to her, so I'm neutral to him. I don't think he's a proper jerk. At least, not from this chapter.

I loved the interactions of Dom with both her family and Scorpius'. They were different from anything I've read before and quite interesting.

The descriptions, of course, are very lovely. They seem to flow sweeter than the nectar of honey.

Great job!

♥
Linders

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