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Review:elegantphoenix says:
Hi, it's boysof_p0tterfan509 here with your review! Hope I didn't take forever :P

This was a nice one-shot. I thought that you did very well with adapting your picture to words, and though I might have wanted to see more of the scene with Rose and Scorpius than just her recalling it, I understand you had a word restriction and had to work with what you had. It's very understandable. I liked the interaction between Rose and her grandmother, and the way you managed to keep Molly's caring and understanding nature intact, while also portraying Rose's fear of being ostracized by her family for being with the son of one of their biggest rivals.

There were a few things that I noticed here, spelling and grammar that is. One thing you have to watch out for is capitalization. The personal pronoun 'I' should always be capitalized, even in contractions such as I've, I'll, I'd, etc. Also, the Burrow should also be capitalized because it is also a pronoun (the name of a person, place, or thing).

Also, your and you're. You may have got them confused.

"Don't be afraid to admit your in love." < In that sentence, it should be you're because 'your' is possessive, and incorrect in this context. You're is a contraction for 'you are'.

One sentence that confused me was this: "Tell the truth and dig yourself into a whole which you would eventually have to dig your way out of later by telling the truth. Or just tell the truth now." I think you may have ran yourself in a circle with those two sentences, and may need to edit them a bit for clarification.

Overall, I really did think you did a good job with the challenge, and I'm glad you decided to enter it at all :) Thank you again!


Author's Response: omg!! my grammar is soo bad. i lost my beta so i didnt have time to get a new one. but thanks so much for the review. i love constructive criticism. no really. i do :D
thanks again for the review. this was my first ever challenge and i really enjoyed it. great learning curve.

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