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Review:Dark Marked says:
Nice song-fic--- but so sad!
Problems:
Reppetative:
"Now what I thought stupidly. I was so stupid. How could I have not seen it?" could be reworded.
Grammer:
try using a few more commas!
Spelling:
n/a
plot:
a little unexplained-- I'd thought Draco hadn't killed himself at the end-- yet apparently she did... could you explain that to me? But I also liked how you didn't give everything away.
title:
Fanominal! Really ties in well to your story!
overall: nice peice, a little nip and tucking and it will be great! you have promise with this story so with a little rewording it'll mean so much more-- you'll leave the reader thinking for hours!
--dark marked

Author's Response: I've been trying to do away with words that I don't need but it doesn't seem to be working out so well hence the repetitiveness. lol. English was never my strong point in school.

I thought about making this kind of like a romeo and juliet story but thought that that was to overdone so I left the plot open. He had left her basically, a suicide note which he was thinking about but decided against it in the end but she didn't know. She thought he was dead So I was going to have her follow him but relized that this way was more intriguing I guess you could say =]

The title came to me in a dream believe it or not. lol. I'm weird like that.

Anyways, I'm glad you took time to read and review and I will definately keep your suggestions in mind for when I fix the errors in the story =]


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