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Review:LadyPopsicles says:
OHEMGEE.

NO! >:O

Stupid move, my dear Hermione. You could've been scooped up in Draco's lovely, muscular arms. DAMMIT. bleh. gadfgsgh9tewikbJGIUFGifhg3095.

As for Draco, in the beginning of the chapter, I wanted to give him a huge, bear hug and share a cookie with him. He seemed so confused by his surroundings; lost. But, after a few paragraphs I wanted to smack him in the back of his head for his lack of skills with comforting people.
-__-' LOL.

Over all: Stunning plot, but the words didn't really connect with each other. It didn't flow correctly--sort of rushed, if that makes sense. Since, at first his feelings in the beginning for Granger was all like "YO, I HATE HER SO MUCH! HOW DARE SHE TOUCH ME?!".

Soon after that, Draco became too friendly--friendship and comfort will build over time, and since 'Mione and Draco is all stubborn and too prideful, it will take a few chapters, not just a few moments after. I don't know how to say it correctly without coming off as a meanybowbeenee. :<

But I liked it dearly. I hope this makes you become a better writer, even better than what you are now--which is FABULOUS. I hope you don't think of me as a mean-story-basher. And if I come off as that, I apologize. That's not what I meant to do. D:

8/10

-LadyPopsicles

Author's Response: hahaha yes, he's dreamy.
i don't think you're mean at all! i actually agree with everything you brought up here. it's my first fanfiction ever so i wasn't quite sure how to get it started... which is why it's rather awkward in the progression. hopefully that didn't ruin the story for you.
oh, and you'll see in the later chapters that they're not all that stubborn and prideful after all (at least for the purpose of my story... it's easier if they're insecure, hehe)

thanks so much for the review! hope you keep reading and reviewing :)


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