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Review:Mistress says:
Another chapter!

Itís all about mentioning your Fatherís name and showing them the puppy eyes. Worked every time, until Rose was granted with the damn badge.
-I like how Albus is a little bitter that he is his father's son, but at the same time he's not bitter enough to use it to his advantage, haha.

Something must be done.
-This is great too! The start of a plan!

Zeke reminds me of Bink.

The Bloody Baron scared the pot pie out of me in my First Year and Iíve never felt the same about them since.
-HAHAHAHA Literally laughed out loud. There were people at work in the lobby getting coffee. They looked at me weird.

nevermind, Zeke reminds me of Freddie haha.

hahaha love the idea for the kitty! I wish I could have seen some more of the detention with the girls and really shown their personalities. I really like that Albus has a different perspective around Hogwarts, though I am still eager to see the more calm, lighthearted side of him. Maybe that might come through with a little backing off of the hatred for Palmer stuff? Maybe focus on other things for a while. That'll probably come across when you describe him on the pitch and stuff.

Like I said in the last review, I really love this story so far. You have such a fantastic start and I can't wait to see where you go with it! I like Zeke and Jackson, though I want you to bring them out a little more. I have a clear Zeke in my head, but not Jackson. I only have blond and pays attention to his grades. Give me a few more things and give him distinct personality :) Love them all! Don't forget subplots and stuff...and I already have ideas about dear Lily. She is old enough to be snogging of course! Glad to see Al being all protective! xoxo

Mistress

Author's Response: Thank you again :D The next chapter will be Quidditch and I am SUPER excited about it because I have a lot planned for it (; Not only will we see more of Al's personality on the pitch but many others, including Zeke & Jackson!

I wanted to write more about the detentions to know more about the girls instead of only knowing Rose is this Head Girl monster, Bree is his enemy, Mona is Zeke's crazy ex and Alexandra is into Quidditch. But I PROMISE we will see more of them. soon. (;

haha, I love Lily. I have so much planned for her. Poor Al, he's gonna give himself a heart attack because of the girl. :)

Thank you so much again :D


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