"This is Louis, Dominique's sister." - If this isn't a typo, we have problems, my friend. Big problems.
Okay, aside from that appalling mistake to rival the whole bead/beard scenario, I thought this was such an enormous improvement on the last chapter. I think it was quite obvious that I didn't really enjoy that one but this was ♥♥♥, if only for the gorgeous, wonderful perfectness that is Louis/Annah. Screw plot. Keep this.
I definitely got a few more laughs out of this than normal. I'll throw some favourite lines at you:
- Fortunate to have Veela genes as even if not particularly well dressed, v. pretty. - any mention of his prettiness gets me, in all fairness.
- Hid behind Annah - CUTE
- Fully expected her to let her slim little hand slip from own. Which she didn't at all (etc) - see above as well as a little bit of a -gasp- moment and whatnot.
The funny ones were pretty much non-12+ thus non-review suitable but you probably know what they are anyway.
Lovely break from the plot itself, anyway. Slows it down a bit, makes it easier on the reader to follow, will get you reviews which is always nice and it's just really rather lovely. If these two don't end up together by the end, I am going to strop. Massively. Jane-inspired caps and everything. That little paragraph when Louis was talking about how they 'fit' was one of the sweetest things possibly ever, and if not, definitely in all of your writing. It was one of those moments that can only be referred to as squishy. All warm and fuzzy and loveliness.
I am interested to know how many chapters you've put flounce in thus far, across every single one of these spin-offs. It crops up so often (for both Victoire, Dom and Louis) and I think now it's become more than just a quirk of yours and more of a means of reinforcing character, setting, etc which is hugely helpful and ... stuff. Continuity and all that jazz.
So, yeah, liked it infinitely better than the last update and I really do love it to bits. I think I'd forgotten quite how much until now.
I will, of course, appreciate getting back on track with the plot but this lovely bit of character filler was a fabulous distraction from that and if you ever get the urge to throw a bit more in later, there'll be no complaints here.
Author's Response: Ahahahahahahahaha! Seriously, almost died laughing when you pointed that out. Most ridiculous typo ever. Although it does, and I think I've mentioned this to you before, give a bit of an insight into the Dom-Louis dynamic? Actually - should have just pretended it was deliberate, and blame it on Annah rather than me :P
I was far more worried about this chapter than the last one, just shows how well I know my own writing hey? Maybe I will actually have to start re-reading, editing and similar. Louis/Annah is just my favourite. I love them.
They were good quotes though! Especially considering 12+ restrictions and all.
I actually think I need to properly sort out my plot. Like, actually sit down and plot it out. Problem is I just get so carried away with sub-plots and nothingness that it tends to get horribly jumbled up. Couple of chapters worth of nothing maybe?
Well, in as much as I can't really confirm or otherwise, pretty sure you know my feelings on those two. Although seeing you strop like that would be quite something! Really quite tempted now.
Was it really that amazingness? Honestly never really thought I'd write anything that would get that sort of reaction. It's a bit shocking actually.
Umm probably most of them, if I think on it. I'd say you're dead right as well. Very much a character marker - notice it's only Louis, Dom or Victoire at it. Mainly Louis and Dom at that. Kind of just shows the melodramatic, precious side to them? For all that they are completely amazing (and they are,) they're still not great people. Overly demanding and spectacularly narcissistic. So loveable though xD
Eh shmeh plot! I don't wanna! I mean, I know I probably should, but best if able to delay it for as long as possible -nods-
Thank you so much for reviewing lovely, I really am glad you're back to enjoying it, means a lot.