|Review:||evil little devil says:|
I've actually just re-read the entire story so far because I'd forgotten what happened - I was confusing it with Kali's Saharan Lies, just because when I see sand I think Sahara and when I see Sahara I think sand XD
It's amazing how versatile you are as an author. You write the more romance style stories so fabulously and then I come to this which is equally as amazing. I was intrigued from the start, the prologue was wonderfully mysterious it drew me right in.
And then, of course, Helen. I rather like her as a character, you've developed her wonderfully. She's still got that inherent Black snobbery about her, but her independence and willfulness rather endears me toward her. Both Moody and Cadogan intrigue me as well. The description of Cadogan in this chapter regarding his hands - maybe it's just because I'm a pianist and therefore biased, but I found it incredibly beautiful. I could picture him in my head sitting at a piano playing Moonlight Sonata, or reciting great poems in a sunlit dusty room.
The reaction Moody instills in Helen amuses me to no end. I'm now wondering where that bond they now have between them because of him saving her life will lead.
You build up the suspense wonderfully. The slow revealing of the cave, she's only been a few steps in and only once, yet I'm so fascinated by it already. Has Cadogan done something to her by any chance? I'm not sure what, I'm dying to find out though. How is she going to escape this mess? I'm utterly intrigued, I can't wait to find out.
Excellent story, I'm such a sucker for ancient history even though I know next to nothing about it, and of course I love Harry Potter, so the combining of the both has me squeeing rather nerdfully. Your writing is stunning, and I love the atmosphere you've created throughout the story, it has a sort of timeless mystery about it.
Needless to say, I loved it :D
Author's Response: Haha, I have to re-read it when I start writing a new chapter - it's usually so long between updates! I mean to change that... or rather, I keep meaning to do that, but it never seems to happen. ;)
It's a fun story to write, probably because it's very different from my romances (I'm glad that you like my romance style, by the way) and it's a fresh change from writing them. I'm still trying to work through how I'll relate things more explicitly to the prologue, as I've changed some plot points since writing it, but I like it too much to get rid of it. As for Helen, she's another reason why I love writing this story - she's got the best first person voice of all my first person narrators, being as opinionated and snobbish as she is, though she would never admit it. XD
Cadogan and Moody are very strange to write, and I'm glad that you find them intriguing - they're not meant to be entirely trustworthy, and Helen will bounce back and forth between them, flirting with a love triangle that will never quite work out for any of them. ;) Cadogan has an aristocratic delicacy to him that appeals to Helen's snobbery, and being a pianist herself, she can't help but admire his hands. With Moody, she has more of the hate-hate relationship, and that's always hilarious to write. :D
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story! Your comments have made me blush and I don't know what else to say in response other than thank you again! ^_^