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Review:Marzipan says:
Holy cow! I did this challenge myself, so I know that it can be really tough in places, trying to re-word your sentences and what not. No one who had read this would know any of that, though, because this whole thing flowed seamlessly - there isn't one place where the wording seemed awkward or off in any way. That makes me hate you a little bit. Not really, I don't hate you.

Content: My, my! timeturner would indeed be proud of you - your pressing right up against TOS here, aren't you? Not that I'm complaining, since a) it was pretty freaking entertaining and b) despite the intimacy you have here it wasn't done gratuitously. In fact, you made it clear throughout the entire interaction between Rose and Scorp that it was the opposite of gratuitous - that despite the circumstances of their meeting, it was about healing and growing, and not just about lust. That is how I read things, atleast. Also, props for writing a Rose/Scorp that is not hinged on their becoming soulmates in Hogwarts.

As a biology nerd, I love your use of terms like trapezius muscle and travelled superiorly to his lips. Visions of Comparative Anatomy floated in my minds eye at those words.

Great job, loved it!

Author's Response: I agree, this was a little tough in places, particularly not being able to say "go." That one really threw me for a loop! It was a great challenge though, JLHufflepuff did a great job!

Haha I really did try to push the envelope, most of the other sex scenes I've done were more suggestive than blatant and usually use a bunch of floaty descriptions to lead the reader. I'm glad you recognized it wasn't gratuitous, this was actually a weird move for Scorpius or what he would have normally done, but I didn't want people to get the idea that it was this one night stand thing. I wanted it to lead a bit more.

You're a biology nerd?? Yay!! I'm a physical therapy graduate student (I feel like i've repeated that so many times that people know it, but maybe I haven't haha) so descriptions of the body and other biological processes are something that I specialize in. I love descriptions of anatomy, and oftetimes if I'm writing in next gen or something I will make my characters healers, because people write about what they know, and i know about healing :) And Anatomy. I know a CRAP TON about anatomy. And Physiology. And Pathology and musculoskeletal and neurological impairments. And i kinda want to cry :)

Thank you so much! I really appreciate this review!


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