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Review:momotwins says:
A few spelling nitpicks:
sherif = should be sheriff
he rock = should be the rock
to cheerful = should be too cheerful
back now” = should be back now."
so concerned about Cadogan. = should be a question mark
not to many = should be not too many
Would it had continued = should be would is have continued

And now on to the good stuff. The connection from his saving her life forming between them - great job inserting a bit of obscure canon. I adore this description of the Aswan dam too: "Its loss stood for the wonders of British Muggle technology, destroying in order to create." Absolutely beautiful and yet tragic, in the way that very true things often are. I love the rug making the trunk shake, too, that made me smile.

Oh jeez, has Cadogan got her under an Imperius? Or Legilimency? This was a very disturbing chapter! I feel rather freaked out about what's going to happen to Helen. And is the thing that made the marks on the stone the same thing that scarred Moody? Who's a wizard and who's not? Dying here! Extremely fascinating, and I'm dying to read more, as always :)

Author's Response: Oh wow, that's the most typos I've had in a story for a while, so thank you for pointing them all out. My fingers are giving me trouble lately - too nervous, I guess - and it's showing now. *blushes*

Finding information on the Aswan dam was heartbreaking. I'd heard that Philae and Abu Simbel had been moved, but I didn't realize that was a more recent event. That they'd left those monuments in the water for so long is incredibly stupid. They're so important in Egyptian history, yet what do the colonizers care? I thought also that it'd be more of a Muggle thing to do - the wizards would have found another way that would have saved the monuments. Surely the Temple of Isis would be useful to the wizards. :P

It's great that the chapter turned out well - I wasn't satisfied with how it moved the plot along at all, it seemed like one of those filler-ish chapters. I'm tempted to just keep writing this instead of moving to another story. There's still a good bit of the plot left to go.

I also very much like the idea of Moody's scars. It never entered my mind before, yet it's very interesting, and very possible. He's a mysterious one, to be sure. ;)

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing this! It means a lot to hear your opinions on this story. ^_^


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