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Review:celticbard says:
Hi Moonbaby,
I'm here from the HPFF Review Tag thread to take a look at your story. ^_^

This first chapter sets up an interesting plot. It was nice to see all the Next-Gen kids not getting along perfectly. Their rivalry in this fic is not good-natured, but rather, has a sharp edge to it. These kids really don't like each other, which makes them all the more realistic. I also liked the fact that the rest of the student body of Hogwarts was less than thrilled to see that only Weasleys made it into the House Cup competition. Their not an entirely popular group, which allows for a unique perspective, considering the fame of their parents.

As far as constructive criticism goes, I would suggest you try not to introduce too many new characters in such a sort space of time. With a bunch of new names and faces to digest, readers can quickly find themselves lost. Also, I would consider adding a bit more description. You don't have to overload your story with sensory details, but it would be nice to get inside Lucy's head and experience what she does. Of course, these suggestions are only based on my opinions. Please do take them with a grain of salt. ^_^

Good luck with this fic!

Best,
celticbard

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter, and I've been thinking about going back and editing this one up a bit, so thanks for the suggestions! ;)

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