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Review:elegantphoenix says:
Hi, it's boysof_p0tterfan509 from the forums here with your review :) Sorry for the wait, but I'd like to thank you for taking up my challenge!

..Now that the formalities are over, on with the review. I thought that this one-shot was very sweet and caring, in a way. How Lily was attached to her sister in the way a younger sister would be, as though her days of looking up to her older sister had yet to subside. Though I liked the idea of the wedding dress being handed down, I think you might've been able to do a little more relating to the picture - maybe Lily seeing the dresses through the window of a shop some time before her own wedding, or her hopes of becoming a bride someday, etc. But I do like that you incorporated and adapted the picture into words by using little details and expanding them, which is sort of what the challenge was mostly about. So lovely job on that part.

It seemed a bit abrupt for Lily to change her mind about how she felt about her sister's absence when she saw that her chair was empty at the wedding, as she had been upset about it earlier in the story and not even James' arms around her had been able to ease her anxiety. Maybe I can see it as a little epiphany she had in the end. ;) But it was still a wonderful read overall. Thanks again for giving the challenge a shot.

Best,
Nadhira

Author's Response: Thank you for the review!

With only so many words, I had to choose my scenes carefully. Lily never really got the chance to look for her own wedding dress because her mum had immediately pushed her own dress onto her and Lily didn't have the guts to say otherwise.

As for the abruptness, that's really what it was. One moment, she was fretting over Petunia not being there, the next she just didn't care anymore. No real explanation except that she saw James, how happy he was, and she just suddenly realized how much she loved him.

It took that single moment at her wedding for her to forget her worries. And sometimes that's how it is.

Anyway, thanks again for the review and the challenge. I really enjoyed it. ^^

Dem


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