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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oh wow, Lee Anne, this is a fantastic Snape/Lily story. You say over-the-top, but that's the ship - it's so dripping with angst and unrequited love that it makes every story about it feel overdone. But I don't think that yours is over-the-top. It's heartfelt and filled with mourning, but it never crosses the line with the angst and drama. It's just enough.

I love the whole situation you've created for the two characters. It's unexpected, and that's what makes it so unique and fresh for a Snape/Lily story. To think that he was able to see her that one last time and they were able to have "a moment" together makes this almost a happy story. Snape finds that heaven at the end, and that's what makes this a different kind of story.

There were a couple of lines in which you oddly chopped up the sentence. I'm probably guilty of this too, but all the same... *looks innocent* They are usually sentences (not paragraphs) beginning with "But". You may want to look those over.

Anyway, this is a great addition to the best Snape/Lily stories on the archive, though I shouldn't be surprised, seeing that you wrote it. ;)

Author's Response: Hi Susan!
Haha, yes, I suppose Snape/Lily is a rather over-the-top ship and that's probably why I have a secret love for it. I don't know, I'm a sucker for unrequited love, it's so painful...yet poetic. Like something out of Keats.

Agh! Sorry for rambling. As always, you've left me a little incoherent with your fabulous review. Thank you! I felt really lukewarm about this story. Even though I like the pairing, I wasn't sure how it would turn out. And the ending was clunky. I just couldn't get it to work right.

Thanks so much for letting me know about the awkward sentences! I was trying to go for a choppier style, but maybe I should stick to legato instead of staccato? ;) Either way, I'll wait a few days and then go over this with a clearer mind. I don't know about you, but I can never revise a story right after I post it. My brain seems trained to miss all the typos, hehe.

Again, thanks so much for everything, Susan! I truly cherish your feedback. Take care and be well!

Best,
Lee Anne


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