OMG! You are officially one of the most talented writers in this site. For me, at least. Your works are amazing! You always leave me in awe with your writing style and I love how complex and beautiful your stories are. I know I sound like a total fangirl right now, but I just can't help it!
For the most part, I was confused while reading this. Not a bad confusion but a good one. I don't even know if 'confusion' is the right word, because I was also impressed, galvanized, thrilled, what have you, with the quality of your writing. I think this is one of those stories that can take forever to grasp and impossible to completely figure out. And that's good! It just means that this is very thought-provoking and worthy of close scrutiny from readers - which is very rare for any story. Good job!
Have you heard of a very old novel called Poliphilo's Strife of Love in a Dream by Rennaissance author Francesco Colonna? It's a story about the protagonist Poliphilo (duh! :P) having the most unusual experience of dreaming while dreaming - like having a dream within a dream. I know, it sounds really weird and to be honest, the novel itself is completely twisted - in a beautiful, itellectually stimulating sort of way. I've only read the English version (the original text is a mix of Latin, Italian, Greek with a touch of Egyptian heiroglyphs) and it.is.unbelievable. The descriptions are beyond stunning, the plot is simple - he searches for love - but the way the whole story's laid out is completely bizarre and so out there that scholars still find it difficult to make sense of the whole point of the novel itself. But I've always thought that maybe, you're not meant to make sense of it, you know? Maybe the author's only purpose is for the readers to enjoy the power of beautifully written words.
Why, you may ask, is this girl telling me all this? Well, it's because I have this theory that you're a distant relative of Francesco Colonna... JOKING! lol. I just thought that this piece reminds me a little of that awesome story, is all. I have this vision of you (though I have no idea what you look like) writing this while in a trance - just typing away, doing free writing while humming to yourself (okay, maybe not the humming part) and the result would be this very eccentic piece. Haha
I have a lot of favorite lines that it would be ridiculous to paste them all in this review (I hope you can consider this a review - more like a fan letter to me) but the thing that I most love about this is that your style is evident, despite the fact that this story is not the usual RonsGirlFriday material that I'm used to. Like this line for example: Could you love a man with the soul of a poet, if he had a face like the back end of a bus? --> so very you! Not that I'm claiming that I know a lot about you to tell precisely, but... yeah. Can't really explain it.
I agree with the previous reviewers that this is less of a story than a stunning piece of lyrical poetry. That only proves my point that you are an awesome writer. I better stop now before I get too fangirl-ish again. Haha
Thank you for writing this! ^_^
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this review. o.O
You're right, much of this is intentionally vague, and therefore I can see how it would seem confusing at times. I had some definite ideas and concepts in my head while writing it, but because my writing style is usually so straightforward, I like to experiment with being more vague and abstract. My intent here was more to create images and feelings, rather than make it totally clear what is going on. And no, I've never heard of that novel or author, but they sound amazing, and I'm flattered to be compared to them. ^_^
Ahahaha...the line you pointed out as seeming very "me" -- that is true isn't it? I would say that line probably has more of my personality in it than the rest of the lines in this fic. XD You are starting to know me too well. -shifty look-
Thank you again, thank you so much. I'm very embarrassed it took me so long to respond, but I always put off replying to really great reviews because I'm always worried about doing them justice in my response - and then I got super busy with work and really let my reviews go for awhile. Anyway, I apologize again. I am really grateful for all of your awesome feedback and wonderful reviews!