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Review:Alopex says:
Perhaps I should go back and read the prologue. I did figure out, from Charlie's comments and Kate's thoughts, when the prologue was in relation to the rest of the story, but it's been so long I can't remember much from the prologue. Well, you've summarized it here to some extent, anyway.

I think you did an excellent job at capturing the awkwardness that occurs when you encounter someone you haven't seen in a long time--especially when the situation is more complicated than simply bumping into someone you know but never were close with.

Charlie as an auror? Interestingly enough, he and George are the two surviving Weasleys that I've never pictured as aurors. The rest, I can see it somehow. I guess I just mentally peg Charlie as the dragon guy and leave it at that. However, given how involved his family was in the fight against Voldemort, and the family connections in the Ministry . . . I do think it's plausible that he'd experience a certain pull or pressure.

Author's Response: I never really liked this chapter very much, but I'm glad at least the discomfort of their encounter read well. You're right in a lot of ways about the Auror bit. It still feels a bit cliche to me, even knowing where the plot is supposed to go and that there is a better explanation for it...but I never felt I introduced it right. I'll add it to the "re-work needed" list.

Thank you again for reviewing!!


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