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Review:Alopex says:
You really do have a knack for creating and describing characters. It's amazing how they spring to life in a single chapter. I think that I know more about Augustus Bainbridge and William Beckett than I ever would have if you'd simply listed their hometowns and siblings and hair color, blah blah blah. I already have a feel for them because you have shown who they are rather than merely telling ABOUT them.

Kate is a very appealing narrator as well. I truly feel that I am experiencing things through her. All the information the readers are getting is filtered through her, and I'm very much feeling a connection to her that is often easier to feel in stories written in the first-person.

Well, off to London for Kate, then. I'm a bit suspicious by this talk of holdovers, for example. I doubt things are going to go as smoothly as Henry hopes. Then again, what about bureaucracy is smooth? By the way, I do like the bureaucratic details you've included, like Bainbridge's title.

Author's Response: I can't fathom where my hang-up with bureaucracy stems from, but I can't seem to stuff enough of it into the story. Hopefully it's not all terribly boring. Thank you for your kind words about the characters. Sometimes I feel my narration tries too hard to tell the reader how to feel about a character, but at least you don't seem to feel too beaten over the head about it.

Thank you again and again. It's so nice to think and talk about this story again.

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