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Review:propertyoftheHBP says:
I really like your characterization of Fleur--I've only read a couple of oneshots about her in fanfic, so this is my first chaptered story about her, but she's consistent from the first chapter to this, which is always good. I only have one little comment to make--it's a bit distracting for me to read Fleur without an accent, which I know sounds odd, because usually it's distracting with an accent. It doesn't sound right in my head, though--I think that even cutting off the "h"s and maybe writing her "a"s more "ah"s would make it more authentic. I do get that accents are difficult to write, however, so I understand where you're coming from if you've purposely avoiding it.

I like the place in time that you picked to write this--right before the battle, and during it, Fleur is going to have to make a lot of self-adjustments, especially your Fleur, with her monsterish obsession of beauty and all. I really like how she's struggling to love Bill, and how she really does, she's just fighting the monster. Like I said in my last review, it's a really original take and I love it. :)

Author's Response: I haven't actually read too much Fleur fanfic myself, so I don't know much about how she is in other stories. =P There IS a reason I left out the accent, and it's not because I think it's too difficult. As it's first person from her perspective, she wouldn't hear an accent for herself, and I'm trying to write it how she would see it. I know it might be irritating (I get a bit distracted by it too, to be honest), but I don't think it would fit with first person. I do, however, try to use contractions in her speech to show that she's not AS comfortable with English.

Thank you for reviewing! :D


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