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Review:lia_2390 says:
Hiya Gryffin_Duck!

You did a fantastic job with setting the scene of the common rooms and then with the room of requirement. Honestly, were I in Hufflepuff, I'd feel tortured with all those scents of food all the time. I love the feel of this story, very retrospective and as if I should be sitting down at a bar with a drink in one hand talking to a stranger about my school days and this one boy.

I liked the relationship between Remus and Ainsley. It's good that for all his troubles, he had a decent steady girlfriend who stuck by him. You wrote teenage-Remus really well, caring and sweet just like his adult self.

I also liked how you made use of the sense of smell and memory. It sort of tied everything together in the end when Ainsley was talking about what happened to Remus and the family she has now. I really could see her getting all carried away and forgetting what she had in the oven. And I'm glad they parted on friendly terms too.


Lia.

Author's Response: Hi Lia! I'm glad you liked the way I described the Hufflepuff common room. It just came to me while I was writing that the place should smell like the kitchens. I'm glad you liked the feel of it because it was something I wasn't sure about.

Aw, I'm glad you liked their relationship. It was tricky because I was trying to avoid the usual Remus/OC cliches.

When I wrote it, I wasn't even sure how I was going to tie in the beginning bit about smell and memory but then I realized I could just have the entire thing a memory. I didn't want them to have a messy breakup, either. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)


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