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Review:AndrinaBlack says:
I liked this story, but I can't quite see anything Heathcliff like in Cho. I think she's too sweet for that and somehow I can't think that she would really hate him for all those things even if she says so. It comes to me more as hating fate. But I really liked the way you wrote her and wrote the emotions. I think it's probably not your fault if I can't see that Wuthering Heights inspiration that well here because I have my own understanding of Cho already.

I liked it that you gave a bit of background to Cho as well. You wrote that bit so interestingly also that I really wanted to know more about what happened there. What did she want to do with a wand as a child? It seemed like something specific that she had in mind. And I didn't quite understand why the other man said that she was clever then. Not only because she had taken a wand, right? The emotions in this also came through as strong ones and I could feel her pain. Well done. :)

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the review! (: I wrote this last summer, after I had first read Wuthering Heights, and while the book isn't as fresh in my mind as it was then, I still feel like Cho might be a lesser version of Heathcliff. As you pointed out, she is a lot sweeter than him, but I've always pictured her selfish to the point where she would resent Cedric for making her fall in love with him and then leaving her. It's an interesting idea, anyway, but I can see how it might seem out-there to someone who wasn't inside my irrational mind, haha. I'm glad you liked it anyway, though.

Looking back at this piece now, I'm glad you like the beginning because I'll admit that I don't really like it at all anymore. I think I intended for the clever bit to be a hooking beginning and then transition into how she wasn't clever for falling in love with Cedric, but who really knows? I had the other man calling her clever because she had cleverly stolen her father's wand and was hiding from him trying to figure out how to do magic. It does seem like there should be a little more there, so maybe one of these days I'll try to rewrite this. Anyway, thank you so much for the review, and the compliments and critiques! (: I really appreciate it.


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