Well, this review really will be shorter, like the last. For one, I don't want to repeat myself too often in the same day, and for another, I've got to be going but wanted to finish this up first.
So let's see. Again, I enjoyed your portrayal of Draco; it is still very good. I find myself unsurprised that he would worry about his own face melting. I am a bit surprised at his response earlier, though. Surely if he was so worried about the disease, then he would have been more concerned about the Ministry's visit? But wait. He was concerned, wasn't he? He took care to lock the door so no one else could enter the room, and he was convinced he'd be carted off to Azkaban (though I couldn't tell if he was being paranoid or not).
I got a kick out of Malfoy trying to open Astoria's desk. I knew he'd get it in the end, somehow or other, but that was quite amusing. His thoughts amuse me. I'm a bit suspicious (though not surprised) that Astoria's accounting doesn't square with what he thinks she's been spending. However, it doesn't seem like a good omen that she bought the last two elves someplace else. I wonder what Malfoy's up to? Surely he's not going to try to leave the Manor to go there? But I can't really see him telling Hermione yet, either, not before he plays the hero and figures it all out himself (or screws up royally in the process).
I need to stop saying I'll be leaving brief reviews.
Author's Response: It will be shorter, but isn't. :P That's fine, really. I'm glad that you're finding so much to say about this story, as it's really interesting for me to look at it from more of a distance to try and get back into writing it. It means a lot that you've read and reviewed the whole thing. Thank you! :)
I'll remember his fears of the Ministry for the next chapter. The thought of him imagining his face melting was far more enjoyable, but I see what you mean - he should be extremely bothered to have the Ministry's presence when he hasn't had proper time to prepare both himself and the house for such an invasion. Although he doesn't like be trapped within the manor, I think he's a bit relieved that it also means that no one else can come in. It buys him the time he wanted.
The desk scene gets everyone! I can't even remember how or why I came to include it, but I'm very glad that I did. Making magical furniture have attitude is very much something JKR would do, and it doesn't happen often enough in fanficiton. Astoria seems to becoming the villain of sorts, though I'm still not sure whether she will be in the end. There is something fishy about her, but at the same time, I don't need her and Draco to separate after this story concludes.
Draco playing the hero? I wasn't thinking of that, but it does sound rather good. Screwing up royally, however, is a definite. ;)
Thank you again for reading and reviewing this. I'll wrack my imagination to see whether an update will be possible in the near future.