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Review:Alopex says:
I thought it about time to delve into another of your chaptered works, seeing as I've only poked my nose into one of them so far. And Hermione as an adult? Now, that is difficult to resist.

Your writing is very rhythmic. It has a flow. It's rather like being caught up in a gently but firmly flowing stream. You hardly notice you're drifting (reading) at first, but soon you find you've come much further than you thought, and you can't pull yourself away.

I thought you did a good job of conveying Hermione's discontent with her life. The part you included about her listing all nice things in her life and trying to convince herself that she's content was great. People really do that, of course, and I'm sure Hermione would. It felt very realistic that she would become irritated with her children, disappointed with Ron, and feeling overwhelmed by her job. All those flapping messages conveyed the discontent very well. One can sense that there are all these things pressing on her that she is ignoring, ignoring, ignoring, finally pretending to pay attention to, until she just has to throw up her hands and shout, "Enough!"

I enjoyed the overall atmosphere of this chapter . . . it was a bit dark and gloomy. Of course, you used specific words that conveyed the effect, but it was more than that. The tone, the flow . . . everything just took on a certain, almost palpable atmosphere.

I loved the way you described Draco and Astoria's relationship as a marriage alliance. Personally, that seems more likely to me than some passionate love affair.

Author's Response: But this story? Really? :S I have to say that it's not my best - I started it as a total joke, just to see whether I could manage a Dramione, and even now I cannot take the story seriously. It goes downhill from this first chapter in my opinion, though perhaps my bias against Dramione is affecting my opinion of this story.

It is, however, fantastic to hear your opinions of any story of mine. I'm glad that you liked this chapter - it is one of the few portions that I've really liked - and even moreso that it had that flowing, rhythmic quality and portrayed her life in a realistic way. It can't be all glory and fun for the trio as they age, especially since Hermione takes a separate career path to Harry and Ron - she's divided from them, and it leads to alienation.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story. I'm curious as to what you'll think of the rest with all its strange twists and turns. ;)


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